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张荪豪的语言功底面貌很好.

Health is important to everyone. Keeping healthy is easy, but many people do not want to do it. (应该加because we can’t stop their bad eating habit.) We shouldn’t eat too much fried food. Without question, (用到RA句型), soft drinks are also bad for health. You shouldn’t drink them. WE should do some exercise, too. Skipping, swimming, going to the health club can help to be healthy. As you can see, keeping healthy is easy. You should try this.

谈柳谷顺序组织好,很流畅(注意他的承上启下)

Health is the most important thing in our life. Of course, we can do many things to keep healthy.(启下). In my opinion, we should eat a lot of vegetables, fruit and a little meat every day. And without question, we can also (用了also就承上) do some sports such as football and tennis to keep healthy.

Generally speaking, we can do many things to keep healthy. And if we can do these things every day, we will become a healthy person.

王振翔的作文比较流利也能现学现用,可惜语法错误太多。

Keeping health is very important. It is very easy. But you must have courage to do that because you can’t eat very much sweet food or drink soft drinks. You can do some sports after you get up. Good luck, everybody! I hope you can be a very healthy person in the future!

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